After the Weimar Government ended the war two days into their role, many nationalists became upset. The list of the upset includes Hitler, who would become the future leader. He thought that the Weimar Government wasn't doing the job they needed to do, so he tried to get himself into the role. At first, the conditions wouldn't allow for this to happen. When the Weimar Government was popular, the citizens wouldn't listen.. But finally, the conditions fell into place for Hitler to use the methods that would allow him to rise to power.
One of the many conditions that would play a role in this would be the Treaty of Versailles. This would be signed soon after the Weimar Government surrendered to the Allies. This would be an issue, because the Weimar government would agree to paying a huge amount of money, which Germany couldn't afford. The other problem would be that Germany would lose a good amount of land, and finally it would have to demilitarize certain parts of Germany, as well as just reduce the size of the army. The reason this is significant to the conditions that would lead to Hitler's rise to power is because this would cause the many other conditions to occur, such as the relationship that Germany and America shared, or the depression that would occur in the 1930s. By forcing such harsh terms, the Weimar government was forcing Germany into a bad position, which would cause the citizens to start looking for other options, such as Hitler and the Nazi Party. Citizens would already start looking for other options, as the fact that the Weimar government would also accept such a harsh treaty seemed to show that the Weimar government wouldn't or couldn't stand up for Germany. Another condition would be the economic depression that Germany experiences after America enters the Great Depression. Because Germany was receiving money from America to pay for the reparations, Germany's economy relied on the cash flow from America. When America entered the Great Depression however, Germany couldn't afford to pay. This is significant because it would cause the citizens to start looking for other options as mentioned earlier. This is helpful to coming to my claim, because the fact that the people had become more willing to find the other options meant that Hitler has an opportunity to rise to power, which would become more useful if he used his methods. The final condition would be when Hitler became a chancellor. Hindenburg allowed this to be done so that everyone could control Hitler. However, it became apparent later that this wouldn't be the case. Hitler was able to put out different acts, and even send people to concentration camps. This piece of evidence is significant to my claim because it would allow Hitler to control the people. With the concentration camps for those that opposed him, he could make sure that citizens that were in opposition didn't speak out, or even continue to be the opposition. Therefore, it's helpful to my claim because it would allow Hitler to use other methods to come to power. It could be argued that this held him back, because there would be a constant check of power. However, he was able to get the Enabling act in, which would allow the Nazis to pass any laws needed without having the majority.
One of the methods that Hitler would use was the concentration camps for political opponents. This would be helpful for Hitler's rise, because it would allow him to keep opponents from speaking out against him. This would lead to him having much more power over Germany, and would also lead to less political opponents overall. Therefore, it helped in his rise to power. It could be argued that because the concentration camps would cause the government to look bad, it would lead to Hitler not coming to power. However, throughout history it has been shown that concentration camps haven't led to revolts against the government, but rather more compliance. Another method that was used was the passing of laws through the Enabling Act. As stated earlier, the Enabling act allowed the Nazis to effectively pass laws without having the majority. This would help Hitler's rise to power because it would allow him to not have to deal with political opponents. It would also help force more control over the citizens, and would allow Hitler's goals to be met. Therefore, Hitler would gain more power. It's useful because it shows that Hitler's rise to power was partially a result of him having the power to pass laws with ease. Laws that, in essecne, could lead to him gaining even more power.
In conclusion, Hitler rise to power was a result of the methods being used with the right conditions. Because of the Treaty of Versailles, the economic depression, and the Enabling Act, Hitler would be able to gain support from the citizens that had lost faith in the Weimar government. Hitler's methods, such as creating laws through the Enabling act or using concentration camps to hush political opponents, would allow Hitler to gain power because of laws that could lead to such an increase, or because of the fact that fear would spread through the people.
Nice giant picture of Hitler's face.
ReplyDeleteI think you could have provided some more little supporting details to really prove you understood all of the necessary knowledge (like going into more depth with the concentration camps initially used by Hitler). Explicit analysis is there but there could be more. Plus, I think it would be beneficial to explain and analyze how the methods used helped Hitler gain power. Your essay is easy to follow and well-structured. You express yourself well. I would say this essay is about a 13. It has a thematic approach, is well organized and focused, and has some explicit awareness.
Good job, Araam.
You contextualize your beginning well, the opening two lines provide a strong start to your essay, by showing where Hitler was as opposed to only discussing where he would be once he began working for power. Overall, however, I felt your opening paragraph could have been a little stronger had you included your basic examples, although that could be more my personal preference over anything else - I find it helps to have a clearly defined goal before writing an essay, then explain these goals in the start. It makes flowing through the essay smoother, and if you provide those parameters for yourself you make sure you focus on what you want to focus on, and you don't drift off course.
ReplyDeleteYour next paragraph starts off well, I like how your examples are so cut and dry. Point A, Point B, Point C, all in a neat row. However, it feels as if you are being bombarded with information and not enough is being explained. Perhaps you could have picked more out of the information given, been more explicit and explained exactly -why- the Germans felt the gov't wouldn't stand up for them (the treaty weakened the military, something that was an object of German pride, etc) instead of glossing over it. A good example of what I am talking about comes from your point about the Great Depression...it is mentioned but nothing is done with it. You tell the why of it (what started it) to an extent, but then simply state that, "This is significant because it would cause the citizens to start looking for other options as mentioned earlier" but provide nothing else. Why did it matter that their country was in severe economic decline? You could mention, perhaps, the fact that a large chunk of the population of Germany was unemployed, or the fact that they were burning stacks of money because it was so worthless (rapid inflation). Attempt to flesh out each one of your points more, give your essay more meat and BE EXPLICIT.
And again in your third paragraph, you have the same problems. You give great reasoning, even stating what opposition might say (8-mile!)...however you still leave a lot to the imagination. Your key points are stated, but not developed enough to provide a solid argument, instead you gloss over them. Focus on digging deeper into your arguments and points to build up a solid base and you will see your points increase quite a lot. The ideas and concepts are there, and -you- understand exactly what you are talking about, unfortunately there are some details you choose to not share with the rest of us!
I like your conclusion's structure, try to structure your -introduction- like that, however...it gives your main points but does not talk about them in depth, it simply sets the stage. For a conclusion, more meat would be beneficial. You do not want to re-write your essay, but give your more solid points here, just to remind them of your arguments.
In closing, you grasp everything, that much is clear...however you do not quite deliver any deep argument, there is not as much meat as there could be. Focus on giving more depth to your argument, and try to outline your points in the beginning. If you have them stated, you can look over them and see just how many you have and weed out some of the weaker/less important ones if you feel like you have too many, or if you have too few you won't have to plan and make allowances for more during the course of your essay. Overall, I give it a 12/20.